The Aberration (Completed)

The Aberration (Completed)

50 Part Story 42.7K Reads 1.4K Votes
Merve (Merv-aye) By XxMinnowxX Completed

(The Liberation Trilogy, Book 1)

Sandar inhales deeply and faces me with a pleading look. He's asking me, non-verbally, to help him. Help my grandfather. Help the world.
"So you're basing the fate of a whole population on the survival of one man?" I ask. It must sound crazy, surely, even to his ears!
"Yes, it so happens that we are."
She lives in a time when appearance means everything; when brown eyes are the key to survival, and dark hair is the only normality. A time when having any other eye colour is an aberration, and results in certain imprisonment - or even death.
The world is governed strictly. It is all for their own good, they know, and no one dares question the authority of the government.

It has been a decade since the last known human without brown eyes died, and no one has been sighted having any abnormal eye colour since.
If you have the misfortune to be born as an Aberration, you will be taken away from your family, to a place no one returns from; a poor, defenceless child thrust into a world that is both cruel and filled with conflict.
Her name is Auriella Vanhanen, and she is a blonde with grey eyes.

I'll have to read this at some point. So behind on my library haha
                              But every vote counts and you're so close to a thousand so I'll give you your votes in advance ;)
XxMinnowxX XxMinnowxX Aug 26, 2013 10:05AM
                              The reason I wrote that little bit at the beginning was so that I would have a riveting first-sentence that made you want to keep reading. Did I do it wrong? =) And do you think just starting from 'holding her frail hands between mine' would be too boring?
AndrewMonk AndrewMonk Aug 25, 2013 08:07AM
Nice opening, written in omniscient, not that that's a big problem for prologues.
@JustClick, gracling? I think it's different, like I guess they relate to death and eye color... But I don't see it, well I guess I only read the first chapter so...
This seems like a great story, I have only read the first chapter and I'm already hooked!:) Love it!
DesiraeWallace DesiraeWallace Mar 23, 2013 01:45PM
This story reminds me of The Giver, but with a twist. I really like it, and I'll be reading more :)