Great Spirits

Great Spirits

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Sno By -S-N-O- Updated Feb 05

After the gods turn their backs on humanity, humanity has to make do with what is left. The seas become tempered and the land carnivorous, filling with creatures that prey on man. They built massive walls and great ships to weather the storms and, for a while, that was enough. Things are changing now. The equilibrium is breaking. When a pirate comes to discover one clueless spirit left roaming around, he realizes it may be the only thing that separates them from destruction.
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@Aphrodite270 for the beautiful cover design!

  • bonds
  • celtic
  • change
  • druids
  • forest
  • friendship
  • gods
  • growth
  • love
  • manxman
  • medieval
  • mxm
  • nature
  • pirates
  • sea
  • self-discovery
  • separation
  • war
smaoineamh smaoineamh Jul 30, 2017
For a quick action sequence, I'd chop this sentence up into two or three short ones. Makes the pace feel faster.
- - Jun 13, 2017
I'm sorry sir I forgot to give him his antipsychotic medications *laughs*
MisSolstice MisSolstice Jun 15, 2017
Cox if ya ain't gonna do it smartly I'll burn the words right through your skulls :D
smaoineamh smaoineamh Jul 30, 2017
I think you're doing a good job of showing us how he's feeling, so I would cut "in confusion" from after "Wren furrowed his brows." I can picture him frowning, and infer that he is confused and intrigued.
MisSolstice MisSolstice Jun 15, 2017
Had that same experience once... almost fell off the boat and drowned again :D
smaoineamh smaoineamh Jul 30, 2017
If he wants the man to believe Akash is captain, would Wren risk nodding at Akash and making it seem like he's the one in charge?