Fantasy Life Online: The Beginning

Fantasy Life Online: The Beginning

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ivory By Yukipriest Updated 4 days ago

The company called Realgamers has released a new game called Fantasy Life Online. FLO for short if you want to call it that. Our main character gets talked into playing games again. This is a story about his struggles in this new open world game.

  • action
  • adventure
  • anime
  • fantasy
  • game
  • guilds
  • hero
  • justwriteit
  • kingdoms
  • magic
  • manga
  • online
  • powers
  • reality
  • survial
  • virtual-reality
  • virtualreality
  • vrmmorpg
  • war
  • wattys2017
PuppetteBoy PuppetteBoy Jul 08, 2017
To make the book interesting. The characters must not be emediately strong and have kick ass moves
I was about to point out a grammer mistake to realize i already read this lol
Quesios Quesios Jun 07, 2017
White hair? Check. Black scythe? Check. Death Goddess to add to a harem? Not found. Yet. Clichés confirmed.
thinman46 thinman46 Jul 27, 2017
My guess is that the mc is gonna have a crazy psychopathic stalker girl freind who murders alot of people.
Yeaster1 Yeaster1 Jun 16, 2017
Besides of those main mistakes, you're writing pretty well. One more thing, write in the active voice. You don't want to bore your readers,lol, so hopefully you'll take my advice, and continue writing out your own world.
Yeaster1 Yeaster1 Jun 16, 2017
Before went, you have to have a subject. Like I went. If you don't do that the reader will be confused, and the story won't flow.