Liv's doing her best to move on with her life after being abducted by serial killer, Kerr Miller. Unfortunately Kerr Miller isn't quite finished with her...
Aw man I got kind coufused for a moment with the dialouge and the flashback part, but I figured it out XD it's a good story so far, but it was like six pages! I was like: "oh man this is long!" but if I could read a 300 page book in like four days then I can read these little six pages!
There are a few grammar errors but other than that I agree you describe really well. however, i couldn't really get into it because it's taking so long just to go to the next phase of the story.
Your writing is almost perfect I don't see any mistakes. However, I couldn’t get in to it, maybe it’s just not my type of story but there wasn’t anything to get me hooked. I would’ve like to have seen more dialogue or action other than background. But overall it’s a great first chapter. :)
WOW! I really honestly can't find any mistakes! no lie, maybe a couple grammar errors but I didn't even notice because I was so drawn into this story! keep up the good work (: all I can say is you're an amazing writer! Congrats! (:
I agree with the comments bellow; a very powerful read. It drew me in straight away, maybe dragged on for longer than needed though. I found no grammar or spelling errors, which is great! :') It's a really good start, and the story idea is a great one! *Voted*.