Fallen Angel

Fallen Angel

285 Reads 6 Votes 2 Part Story
Lexi_True By Truedead Updated Jan 23, 2011

Araorah has major daddy issues. And one day when her temper gets the better of her, her father banashes her from her home. As she is falling literally out of the sky, as she is about to dive into the water it catches one of her wings. Who is this unusual stranger that saves her? And can he help her find a way back home?

Truedead Truedead Apr 13, 2011
@chika_flaka
                              thanks. yeah i need to go back and edit everything
chika_flaka chika_flaka Apr 13, 2011
I am going to give u some advice that was given to me. New speaker new line it makes it easier to read. i'm not trying to be mean just trying to help u. 8)
xMixim xMixim Apr 01, 2011
Short and interesting/ Perhaps add this to the first part? Because it seems kind of short. Go over and read again for some minor grammar/ spelling errors, that would clean it up. Please continue writing! :) 
xMixim xMixim Apr 01, 2011
This chapter is really good/ liked the cliffhanger haha Screamed is spelled wrong at the last sentence, i also recommend making paragraphs for each quotation so that it's easier to read. :) 
Truedead Truedead Jan 23, 2011
@imsuperweird
                              Id b happy to check it out:)
                              Ill let u know when im done
imsuperweird imsuperweird Jan 23, 2011
Could you please check put my story and see if I should do it or not.