The Tell-All

The Tell-All

326 Reads 12 Votes 5 Part Story
Kli By Cheadarchesse Updated Jan 15, 2012

Kaylee is a young adult who is similar to everyone else in her small Vermont town.  There is just one major difference: she's dead.  And not just dead but murdered.  The killer is unknown to everyone, herself included. This story follows her journey but beware: even I, the writer, don't know quite where this is headed but it shouldn't be too long.

usmcjs usmcjs Feb 19, 2012
Very intriguing beginning. Can't wait to see where you take it
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Jan 15, 2012
@Parogar mystery and intriuge. ;)  I'm glad that the emotions came through.
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Dec 24, 2011
@xXMisguidedGhostsXx I did that on purpose to make it fragmented.  I wanted it to resemble Kailee's mindset.   I've always had trouble with spelling.  Thanks for reading!
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Dec 09, 2011
@RedRose777 really?  Usually I'm pretty good at grammar =/  What in particular is wrong (commas, subject/verb agreement)?  Thanks for the feedback.
                              
                              Kli
IDreamIWrite IDreamIWrite Nov 29, 2011
In the beginning you forgot a comma in the sentence "Yes (,) that 's right I lived."
                              You also need to work on your punctuation. You could get an editor from the  Editor's club.