The Tell-All

The Tell-All

328 Reads 12 Votes 5 Part Story
Kli By Cheadarchesse Updated Jan 15, 2012

Kaylee is a young adult who is similar to everyone else in her small Vermont town.  There is just one major difference: she's dead.  And not just dead but murdered.  The killer is unknown to everyone, herself included. This story follows her journey but beware: even I, the writer, don't know quite where this is headed but it shouldn't be too long.

  • dead
  • ghost
  • murder
  • mystery
  • vermont
usmcjs usmcjs Feb 19, 2012
Very intriguing beginning. Can't wait to see where you take it
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Jan 15, 2012
@Parogar mystery and intriuge. ;)  I'm glad that the emotions came through.
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Dec 24, 2011
@xXMisguidedGhostsXx I did that on purpose to make it fragmented.  I wanted it to resemble Kailee's mindset.   I've always had trouble with spelling.  Thanks for reading!
Cheadarchesse Cheadarchesse Dec 09, 2011
@RedRose777 really?  Usually I'm pretty good at grammar =/  What in particular is wrong (commas, subject/verb agreement)?  Thanks for the feedback.
                              
                              Kli
Dreamingalong Dreamingalong Nov 29, 2011
In the beginning you forgot a comma in the sentence "Yes (,) that 's right I lived."
                              You also need to work on your punctuation. You could get an editor from the  Editor's club.