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Vanessa and the Aquamarine

Vanessa and the Aquamarine

833 Reads 9 Votes 1 Part Story
TheoImmunis By TheoImmunis Completed

A fantastic Children's short story about Vanessa's adventures through strange and far away worlds in order to help the Moon people get back their skills. 
Cover by Intergrapher

x0XjamieeX0x x0XjamieeX0x Jan 27, 2011
Nice job ! Great description, it provides a great mental picture for the reader.
TheoImmunis TheoImmunis Jan 24, 2011
@evanescencefan Thank you very much for reading and commenting :)
TheoImmunis TheoImmunis Jan 24, 2011
@rkrill thank you very much. i was a bit in doubt about the beginning myself and you really pinpointed the problem.  i'll give it a re-write
TheoImmunis TheoImmunis Jan 24, 2011
@WhyteRhose  Thank you very much for your comments. i really needed some outside input on my story. Will give it another read and try to spot the mistakes. i might email it to you afterwards to see what you think. Thank you for offering.   :)
shelbylw03 shelbylw03 Jan 24, 2011
Your welcome and Im going and fanning you just in case you write more. I want yo be one of the first to know lol. Even if you write a different story with different characters I would read it. Your really creative and your writing is great.
shelbylw03 shelbylw03 Jan 23, 2011
That was awesome. If they have some kind of contest you can enter it into, you should.  Are you going to write anymore stories with those characters? If you do I will definitely read it.