"Life is hard," says just about every teenager living an easy life, including Caroline. But when a boat journey goes terribly wrong, life is not just hard.
Life is precious.
Loved it, you inspired me for my own shipwrecked story
This chapter sorta seems like titanic cause the iceberg, swimming in freezing water...
But it's still super good
I editted chapter one, taking into consideration what you said.
Please, if you have time, read once more through this chapter and tell me what you think!
If you aren't able to, its fine :)
<3 Drama xx
This was filled with powerful and beautiful images. Your work displays a deep understanding of imagination. This was truly eloquent and had a depth. It was tremendously evocative and thrivingly thrilling!
Yeah but if you read some of my other stuff, i have tried to fix that problem, but then i am using commas too much! I cant win! Hehe. And thanks, every little helps, so vote/comment/FAN and carry on being awesome!
I think you're using 'I' at the start of the sentence a bit too much, and its moving a bit too fast. but, hey, what do i know?
i think the plots really good, all in all, you're a good writer. keep up the good work (: