The Catalyst

The Catalyst

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C.G. Laflamme By VenomousKitsune Updated 3 days ago

When the leader of his black magic cult sends him on a quest, Noah doesn't ask questions. He owes the man his life, and his magical powers. 

A detour on the way has unexpected results, and Noah finds himself teaming up with an illegitimate prince and the leader of the castle guards. Together they set out to complete his quest; finding a powerful magical catalyst. But they're all in it for their own reasons, each one keeping dangerous secrets from the others. 

Much despite himself, Noah gets mixed up in power struggles. One for the throne, and the other at the very heart of the forces that black mages like him control. Until he has no choice but to ask himself a frightening question. 

Do they really control anything?

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I recommend you change the beginnings of some of these sentences from the word "he" since most readers are keen of that. However, I do the same thing with "I" so I know the struggle.
NineLight NineLight Dec 03
This is the part of the story where I would be obsessed with describing the statue. There's a nice brevity here.
This is a great first chapter. It's well-written and very vivid. I'm already intrigued by Noah.
Sandcat- Sandcat- Nov 17
Already, you’ve given us a wonderful introduction to your world. The detail is lovely, but not too much. The only thing that mildly annoys me is the number of unnecessary paragraph breaks.
DragOnWriting DragOnWriting 3 days ago
Very well written.  You have a gift for descriptive writing. Looking forward to the rest of it.
I agree this was a clever and natural way of description. I really liked this.