"You get to compact eighty years into six months.You can imagine what happens next."
I loved it! It's well written and enticing! Upload if you have time please.
I like it a lot. It's been done before but not overused, and your writing is awesome! I voted!
no no no no no no, this can't be all there is, you have to post more, right away.
Cool title. Your have a clean writing stile. There are some grammar mistakes but nothing major. Keep going and you have a vote
No matter how much time you have, it's never going to be enough.
Anyway, nicely written, even though there could have been a little bit more empathy. Anyway, great story.
Nice writing so far.
You have a clear, clean style of writing. There are no redundancies, your main character seems to be very down to earth kind of person.
There are some grammar/spelling mistakes, but you can easily fix them.