War In The ShAdOwS

War In The ShAdOwS

855 Reads 23 Votes 4 Part Story
Joe Smith By frozencup98 Updated Jan 26, 2011

Elizabeth, an average 12 year old girl, doesn't know. but she was born with special powers. her shadow powers have caused her to have a miserable life with no friends. she thought it was just bad luck, but when she starts her first day of school, she doesn't know she will end up somewhere far, far away. and her life will change forever

Kamai000 Kamai000 May 26, 2011
It had a good idea to it, but the first thing the reader will always notice is grammar errors. Try to fix those. Kay?
GreekStarGazer GreekStarGazer Jan 30, 2011
Good job- My only suggestion is to ease off the description of the girl and city. Your throwing it out all at once and although as a reader, I want to know this info, its a bit much all at once.
                              You have a good writing style that sucks you in. 
                              Happy WattPading!
RNMurray RNMurray Jan 26, 2011
Loving the story you do a good job of bring the reader into the story
Purerose Purerose Jan 24, 2011
It's an interesting start but it could use some editing. There are some random capitalisations. :)
frozencup98 frozencup98 Jan 23, 2011
@Emskie-Wings oh its supposed to be fast because this is still the very beginning
                              
frozencup98 frozencup98 Jan 21, 2011
Thanks! and i will in the future. and thanks. wattpad is awesome!