His Control

His Control

3.1K Reads 94 Votes 7 Part Story
NightsShadow By NightsShadow Updated Jun 11, 2012

The story of a teenage girl, overwhelmed by fear and guilt. Her inner termoil is expressed as she battles against a much older man who manipulates  her into his control. She battles to understand herself, her emotions and the sinister side of his nature.

binkers8a binkers8a Aug 31, 2012
what kind of job is she working at and is he just another employee that works with her all in all good chapter
NightsShadow NightsShadow Apr 28, 2012
@Assele_K  Thank you, and no worries im deffinately not in a hurry LOL I appreciate your comments :) x
Assele_K Assele_K Apr 28, 2012
I added periods twice I mean't comma!
                              -facepalm- Sorry about that...
Assele_K Assele_K Apr 28, 2012
Few grammar errors, like during the dialogue you forget to Capitalize some and forget to add periods, periods after it.
                              But wonderful job sorry I took so long. :]
NightsShadow NightsShadow Nov 13, 2011
@kawaiipai **Laughs**  Critiquing is great too LOL as I said before, this is my first attempt at writting so absolutely any help is more than welcome!
NightsShadow NightsShadow Nov 13, 2011
@kawaiipai Thank you, I really do appeciate any comments. Ive never written anything before, so you know, I love all the help I can get! Thanks again