Daylight

Daylight

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Theresa By daylightnovel Updated Jun 05, 2017

Earth as we know it has a secret. In the year 2050, our very Earth becomes part of a convergence of all universes. The opening of a portal shakes our world and the Serephas, the artifact that keeps our world from being destroyed by the Zenghai (a magical force that burns universes away to nothing) is crushed. This causes the Zenghai to break free. Our universe burned away almost instantly, and the rest of the multiverse is doomed to burn away as well. But one lone universe can withstand this magical force. A mostly uninhabited universe, Osisa has only one known planet: Pangrion. The story tells of Lígo Epanastátis, a girl who can defeat the Zenghai. Together, she and a band of misfit soldiers escape from the clutches of the evil Mavolent organization, hell bent on ruling the multiverse. They make it to the Carateers and are ready to fight to restore balance to Pangrion and end the silent reign of the Mavolents. The only question is: Will they ever get to see the light of day again?

ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
either have a period after "'Open the door Ligo.'" Or have "'Open the door Ligo,' said a voice behind her."
ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
lowercase h for "He said" and when it says "he shouted: 'I just...'" you would just have a comma. I don't know if it's incorrect to have a colon, I just know that it is definitely correct to have a comma.
                              "As she was lifted, he shouted, 'I just feel...'"
ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
unless "The Voice" is a proper noun, then make the v in voice capital
ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
"'We can have Bance fight her then just because,' he whispered to Maki."
ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
yay, correct punctuation! :)
                              she said [as she] skipped out the door
ajprince17 ajprince17 Aug 11, 2017
and wouldn't it be nodded their head in a agreement?
                              I mean, yes technically you are shaking your head, but still. Idk, just something I noticed. :)