We Make Them Go Ooh-Rah

We Make Them Go Ooh-Rah

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Patty By Pattykins Completed

What could happen when a 17 year old girl goes to live with her Uncle? Grace Roberts has lived most of her life in different places since her mom left them when she was 7. She has to live though heart break as well as life as the daughter of a U.S. Marine. This story will show you how she takes deployments, homecomings, but most of all the United States Marine Corps. What could happen there? Well read to find out……

Most people I know would never say that out loud. I like them, but they're also really hated for what they did to grunge.
Parris Island terrified me when my family went for my sister's graduation. The crocodiles were everywhere! (It was funny when we told my sister about them. She was like: We need to leave this island, NOW.)
kiera_jo kiera_jo Mar 06, 2014
My father is a Marine and instead of saying stay safe you tell them to keep their head low and their gun powder dry. Telling them to stay safe is actually bad luck :)
ReginaHall ReginaHall Jun 22, 2011
This story has great potential, but you just need to watch that you aren't using copious amounts of dialogue, and just edit and check a couple of grammatical errors.
YourJustJealous YourJustJealous Sep 10, 2010
I like your story, and your style of writing. I did notice when she's talking to Jesse, you tend to put Jesse at the end of the sentence a bit to much. Other than that, I like it a lot. I will definitively keep reading. Please read my story too, it's called: "My Not so Awesome Lame Life." Thanks!