Join James Potter II in his time at Hogwarts.
All the lines of dialouge are very confusing. We don't know who is talking to who.
@eddiesdroidx I agree, it probably shouldn't but it really annoys me! Still I'm not criticizing your writing, it's very good. My favourite HP fan fics are always the future ones. I also agree with cmarykeane. Oh I feel like I'm criticizing I'm not! I love it! :)
this is really good! but sometimes i cant really tell whos speaking in the dialogue.. but other than that! i really like it!
@beatlesaddict joy2thefreakingworld didn't insult the story. all they did was give me some constructiv critisism. besides I don't have all the reads because it's spectacular writing or a great plot; it's because I write about a popular topic and because its been up long enough.
@Joy2TheFreakinWorldd Why don't you write a Harry Potter fan-fiction that has 21,000 views and show her how it's done then.
Please give me suggestions! I have no idea where to go with this and I feel awful for not posting in months!