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Gone With The Leaves [Watty Awards 2012]

Gone With The Leaves [Watty Awards 2012]

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Alexander By maccad Completed

Is set two years after Naruto Shippuden; follow Alex Namati in his adventures from teenager to adult, Alex is a cold boy from a near extinct clan the Namati clan. Whose Kekkai Genkai comes from the joining of Konoha's strongest dojutsu (Byakugan and Sharingan.) Who hates everybody who has a living mum and dad. Will he fall in love with one of his comrades and die trying to protect Konoha. Follow him as he tries to achive his dream, the reinstatement of his clan.

I couldn't comprehend most of the sentences in the middle. Punctuation is a thing, surprise! Please, correct your grammar. It is somewhat lacking.
Hello, Naruto Fanfiction Reviewer here! I'll be going right ahead and leaving any types of criticism and/or thoughts! Please do not get offended, I am simply trying to help. 
                              Well, I shall start :)
Well, well, doesn't this sound quite familiar? What a ray of sunshine he is, am I right? 
                              Anyways, this is kind of a Sasuke goal, but I'll let it pass.
So, to sum it all up:
                              Shigi is basically Naruto
                              Alexander is basically Sasuke
                              And Ari is basically Tenten. 
                              Shikamaru, the Shikamaru, flinching at this depressed kid's scowl? 
                              Yeah, no. Nope.
Transcendent-Host Transcendent-Host Mar 15, 2015
maybe shorter sentences, especially with that last paragraph