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The Baby Project

The Baby Project

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Raviellio By TheRealMinionMuncher Updated May 16, 2015

Jordan Nole is like every other high school kid. But when she gets her long time enemy they will have to work together to take care of a REAL baby. 
 I am going to get my phone. I reached in my back pocket and got my phone. We live in house 803. The house is huge. It is a three story house. It was a baby blue with stones making a path to the door. It was amazing. I walked in the house and saw a pink couch with pink teddy bears on it. The carpet was pink and fluffy. There was a note on the fridge that told us the babies room was on the third floor. I did not tell Marcus and ran upstairs. I saw a door that was bright pink and had teddy bears on it. Big purple wooden letters spelled out PRINCESSES. I looked into the door and could not believe my eyes. We had.....
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AnnaMorse AnnaMorse Apr 04, 2014
That so weird you almost spelled my name except I have 2 'n's' in my first name and an 's' in my last. :0
coldstarlight coldstarlight Oct 17, 2013
You're past and present tenses are slightly mixed. Instead of "somehow I know" it should be "somehow I knew" and also "mad her mad" should be "made her mad". This is a great work in progress, I like the idea so far!
coldstarlight coldstarlight Oct 17, 2013
One suggestion: Don't use the word "thingy". It's quite off putting. :) Also, you should make this part a little more dramatic or descriptive. Other than that this is pretty good so far!