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The Stray

The Stray

2.7K Reads 67 Votes 20 Part Story
EthanC1 By EthanC1 Updated Oct 24, 2013

Being 15 is hard enough, let alone being an orphan. Welcome to the life of Carter, a bump on the head and a few hazy memories is all he remembers about the night he lost the two people he cared most about on this earth. Now he's getting closer to what really happened and the truth may not be as kind as the lies.

bstill bstill Jul 14, 2011
it has great description but i think you need to help the reader get invested in the main character. the end sorta did that for me. i was thinking if that was first and then the explaination it might help the reader to follow a bit more. 
EthanC1 EthanC1 Jul 10, 2011
@CrazyAndProud Thanks, and may I say an amazing comment. I appreciate them, so many on this site don't but I like to hear what people think. Thank-you, glad you liked it.
tianajade tianajade Feb 13, 2011
An interesting beginning. It's mysterious, which is good because it makes the reader want to turn to the next page. Most of your writing flows nicely. Only a few grammar errors, but nothing too major. Your writing really draws the reader in. Good job, and keep writing! (:
mylifeisaverage mylifeisaverage Feb 11, 2011
@Kilo808 Sorry, the picture on mine isn't my picture. I found it on google too.
EthanC1 EthanC1 Feb 10, 2011
@mylifeisaverage Sorry rooting through various pictures, I looked online and found better one that suits my story. I photoshopped the one on there now 
EthanC1 EthanC1 Jan 24, 2011
@DearAgony Thanks, I know I need to work on the sentence thing my teacher is always telling me I'd be a great writer if I could just lose the run-ons, if I've got time later, I'll fix it, and separate the paragraphs. Thanks, for checking it out, glad you liked it and I hope to add more soon (: