When Jake discovers the mysterious Juliette hidden in his beach box, little does he realise that his life is about to change forever. "Trust me" she says but can he trust a beautiful stranger?
Whoa! This really draws the reader in. At least it did me. Interesting & awesome! Very descriptive and clear, wonderful job!ツ
I love your writing. I don't think you should edit anything, either.
Eeek! What a beginning. Your writing was coherent enough to make this girl's situation understandable, but at the same time feel the urgency and stress that she was going through. I am worried about her and I don't even know her name. What is she running from? Hmmm. Guess I'll read on. Voted.
*smile* mysterious beginning, but i think this should have been the prologue..
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Wow, awesome. You're a talented writer. Have you written before? If not, this was an incredible start for a beginning story.