Secret Hill Vol 1: Sinister Town

Secret Hill Vol 1: Sinister Town

903 Reads 203 Votes 33 Part Story
gregory nicholas By NicklausGreg Completed

"All Human beings have three lives: public, private, and secret."- Gabriel Garcia Marquez

Welcome to Secret Hill, A town with dark secret and past...Meet Elizabeth Yves, a college student who bump into a handsome, mysterious, and charming young man named Matthew Devereaux, Who also happen to have a secret of his own...

Part 1: Lust and Love
Part 2: Gods and Monsters

Cover by @bubbleblast27

  • couple
  • dark
  • fiction
  • humanvampire
  • lgbt
  • lovestory
  • romance
  • supernatural
  • vampire
  • wattys2017
  • werewolf
  • witch
Shreya_The_Best_1602 Shreya_The_Best_1602 Oct 27, 2016
Nice chap, a few grammatical errors and also try adding more descriptions.
Lo5t_Juli3t Lo5t_Juli3t Oct 19, 2016
great chapter. really enjoyed the characters and the plot. Plus the songs are great. X
Shreya_The_Best_1602 Shreya_The_Best_1602 Oct 27, 2016
Okay, spelling errors...
                              Eliza's* ex-boyfriend 
                              Quite* a charmer 
                              
                              Just helping!
Shreya_The_Best_1602 Shreya_The_Best_1602 Oct 27, 2016
Alright, try explaining Matthew's features more, and also, remove the mysterious part. He hasn't said much yet so the mysterious part doesn't make much sense.
K_E_Francis K_E_Francis Oct 22, 2016
I dont think you need the last daniel Thompson here.
                              
                              Just start off with "Daniel's a handsome young man who's tall...."
HelloitsPrinceNano HelloitsPrinceNano Oct 26, 2016
This was a great read and  I really enjoyed it but I think that you should make your story past tense in order to make it a little better