Open, Charlie

Open, Charlie

988 Reads 195 Votes 10 Part Story
Olga Godim By olga_godim Completed

Eighteen-year-old Charlie is running away from her stepfather, a New York crime boss. For five long years, he has been forcing her to use her magical abilities to open bank vaults and safe boxes. Charlie wants to escape his brutal rule, but where in America would she be safe from his ruthless avarice? Could she trust anyone? After all, everyone has a price, and her stepfather is devious enough and rich enough to pay almost anything to get her - his personal magical picklock - back.

  • adventure
  • airship
  • novella
  • steampunk
Luvina Luvina Mar 25, 2017
My only critique is that is reveals quite a lot really fast. You could focus more on her fear, and slowly bring out the beatings part as time goes on. Draw it out a little instead of "here, reader, this is why--plop". Otherwise the flow is great. Good start
Terraniel Terraniel May 07
Can she lock doors again as well? Otherwise, this has to get noticed O_O
8fifteenTea 8fifteenTea Jun 05, 2017
Omg. I've never read a book like this on here and It's very interesting, the fact that you gave her the power to pick locks. That's different. Let me keep reading lol
RavenTas17 RavenTas17 Apr 20
Not something people usually worry about.  Bit this makes it relateable and puts us in Charlie's mindset.  I like the way you did this.
Terraniel Terraniel May 07
Isn't a nursery for little kids? I thought she was adopted later on.
Terraniel Terraniel May 07
Eh, why that? I would've quickly changed my complete outfit xD