I think I know you

I think I know you

2.7K Reads 74 Votes 10 Part Story
lorachelve By lorachelve Updated Mar 18, 2012

First day back to school, Ashleigh runs into a series of events with the new guy in town, Jesse.
But, he isn't really new is he?
Something just keeps drawing her to him - maybe it's that twang of familiarity?
Either way, things don't stay happy forever.
Two seconds into her fairytale of a love story, something happens.
And that something has the power to turn that fairytale into a nightmare.

lorachelve lorachelve Dec 11, 2011
@ESYLuc @Pearlascentblue haha okay thank you! I'll keep that in mind when I write(: And maybe I should proof-read haha
ESYLuc ESYLuc Dec 10, 2011
Check your punctuation such as placing commas in your dialogue and in some of your sentences. Double space your dialogue too to make it easier to read. It's very descriptive, which I like. :)
VelvetStrips VelvetStrips Dec 10, 2011
This is a great chapter with great descriptions, especially the detailed one on her curtains. You unknowingly revealed the main character's attitude and all within this chapter. Great job on this! I like the story-line as well. :) Voted!
lorachelve lorachelve Dec 10, 2011
@AdDuling haha thank you so much! Nope, I don't have a younger brother but I do have an elder sister :D hahaha I wish I had a younger brother! They're positively adorable(:
                              @xTIRAMISUx ahha thank you! mhmhmm!
Angeleora Angeleora Dec 10, 2011
I really like this. :D I can totally imagine the cuteness and sweetness of little Shaun! Ashleigh has a pretty cool family. ^_^
AdDuling AdDuling Dec 09, 2011
I do like this one, very sweet, draws you in and the grammar is almost flawless:0)
                              Is this inspired by a real little brother and if so, do you feel the same towards yours:0) Very good! 
                              
                              A.D.