The Blood of Wolves (Book 1)

The Blood of Wolves (Book 1)

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Musical Lion01 By Anonymous_115 Updated 5 days ago

2 packs joined by tragedy
2 wolves joined by a bond
2 different species with a common enemy
1 legend thought to be myth
and 1 wolf to save them all
  
Meet 17 year old she-wolf Lilyanna Reed or most commonly known as Lily, the youngest daughter of the Alpha of the pack. She is a bit of a tomboy and as her father puts it "an irresponsible teenage girl" but how can she help it when she lives in house that has more males than females. Lily is a sassy, confident and brave girl with a temper but you can partially blame the sassy and sometimes violent wolf in her head, Leah. 

To her life is great but what happens when she finds out her mate is the Alpha of the most ruthless, heartless and most lethal pack there is. Don't forget the unknown enemy who is killing off wolves and the legend that is more truth than myth.

I think that you should make the chapter a bit longer. It feels a bit short. Also, I think that there are too many italics when you write "him", "he", "his", etc. But you did a great job and the chapter is really descriptive.
Thanks for your comments. I will try to make the chapter longer. When I first put this chapter up I didn't really know what to put in it.
divalicioustar11 divalicioustar11 5 hours ago
After 'He could not win', there should be a fullstop/period. e.g He could not win.