"I asked her to marry me Chloe...and she said yes"
I froze on the spot just looking at him, I was screaming but no sound came but on the inside I was falling apart...
Hello! Im just stating this story but I saw something in your tags. Instead of chicklit it says chucklit. I'm only leaving this because I know I'd go crazy if it were me. Now, off I go to read your work!
Interesting. I like it. Adding sentences to the last paragraph would be a good idea, the scenery switches abruptly so adding some time would help the reader adjust to the plane ride!
I didn't know it existed either... It has a really nice name though
I didn't know it existed either, I did some research before adding it haha
Good opening. You have a few grammar mistakes which will help the sentences flow much easier:)
wow! that's all I have to say.................... this book is just interesting.