Convergence

Convergence

1.3K Reads 22 Votes 15 Part Story
Kaig92 By Kaig92 Updated Mar 22, 2013

Amidst the black surroundings was a flash of green followed by its quick retreat. I sprang up off of the floor and contemplated my sanity. They were there; I saw them. I rushed to my front door and, without a second thought, crossed the threshold and entered the cold night air. I didn't notice anything at first, just the rustling of wet leaves in the trees and the neighbor's cat meowing quietly next door. I took a few steps down the concrete stairs that lead to my door before I heard the crunch of a breaking twig. I whirled my head to my right, and there, in the street, was the figure with green eyes.

HollyJBlock HollyJBlock Jan 20, 2011
Wow. You write good first sentence whirled me into the story. Keep it up.
puppluv puppluv Jan 16, 2011
Gee wilikers, this was amazing! You have very good vocab (I envy you lol) and you described evrything very well so that I had a clear image of what was going on in my head. As far as I'm concerned, there wasn't any grammar mistakes or spelling mistakes. Good job! :)
JustMe123455 JustMe123455 Jan 16, 2011
Oh my gosh, this was astounding! You have a lot of talent! I absolutely love it so far and I am definetly adding this to my library. There's not much I can tell you to fix, it keeps you hooked & wanting more. Keep it up! :)
Dumisa Dumisa Jan 08, 2011
Wonderful start! You have a wonderful writting voice and i absolutly love individual writting styles. This story is unique, so i'll Vote! 
eyeofthebeholder eyeofthebeholder Jan 08, 2011
one suggestion i have is writing a summary for the story just to help readers know what the story is about!