CRUISING THE DRAKE

CRUISING THE DRAKE

223 Reads 31 Votes 8 Part Story
AllanFisher By AllanFisher Updated Apr 17

The future of the human race rests in the hands of an immortal man and young girl. But can this modern day Noah get enough people through the apocalyptic nightmare to safety in time for us to start again?

Beautiful start, Allan; get right into the nitty-gritty of it, and then drop the background info as the plot develops. Some nits: same as Ryan's comments below-- 7-syllable adverbs (unceremoniously) can be distracting. And Kevlar wouldn't stop a shotgun at short range.
tamoja tamoja Oct 13, 2016
Awwww she wiggled right into his big old soft spot. And he seems like a pretty good bet for keeping you safe. I'd chance it with him
krazydiamond krazydiamond Oct 06, 2016
Where have you been hiding this gem!?? Zombies are my jam. Spunky side kick and casual shake off of bullets? Sold. *nibbles on twizzlers*
tamoja tamoja Oct 13, 2016
Intriguing start. And love the cheeky girl. Apparently he doesn't know all!  I like that.
krazydiamond krazydiamond Oct 06, 2016
Yeah I expect any major city to be on fire or in big trouble o.o Poor Becky!