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RAGING HEAT (Italian Billionaire)

RAGING HEAT (Italian Billionaire)

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_saffire.97_ By Saffire97 Updated Apr 18

Nicole Wilson was only 19 years old working in a diner trying to help her mom with financial expenses when she met Mr.Ravellino the world known ruthless Italian Billionaire of Ravellino Industries who may not be so ruthless towards Nicole but instead the very opposite, but what happens when he tries to play cupid between Nicole and his son Valentino Ravellino the famous playboy who turned her world upside down with an offer that's hard to refuse but little did Nicole know that her answer may just make her life a living hell or the best thing that could ever happen to her. Will Nicole and the playboy find love in each other or will this be the biggest mistake she could ever make?
  What will happen when these two specimen from the opposite side of Town world's collide?

I suggest shortening your sentences and using fewer modifiers. "As" "then" "for" "before"... a lot going on in that sentence!
Saffire97 Saffire97 Oct 14, 2016
@Artgummies1101 thanks hun, I hope you'll like the other chapters as well
Should be a comma after "Diner". This is because the sentence stands without "the owner of Linda"s Diner". (Take out the comma and that line, and you'll see the sentence falls in place)
This is a comma splice. Each complete sentence should have a period following it. Therefore, between "be" and "one". ;)