The Whispering of Bitter Creek

The Whispering of Bitter Creek

4.1K Reads 355 Votes 4 Part Story
Lindsey Clarke By LittleCinnamon Completed

Every family has its secrets. 

Unfortunately for Harlequin Jones, everyone knows her family's nasty little secret. For eight years, Harlequin and her mother have tried to forget the truth and bury the horrors of their past, but when Harlequin's grandmother begs for her to come and stay, the truth refuses to stay dead. 

Returning to the home of her grandparents brings back many happy childhood memories for the thirteen-year old Harlequin; memories of home-made apple pie, playing pretend-horses in the yard and fishing down at Bitter Creek. 

But the visit brings back something else, something Harlequin thought had ended eight years before and she is about to learn that her family's nasty little secret is far worse than she could ever have imagined. 

Blood is thicker than water and family is everything.  

There's no place like home...

This is a great opening chapter. Harlequin's voice is strong and clear, and all sorts of genuine conflict and intrigue is established, with some natural background information parceled out as well. I'm looking forward to reading more.
It's sad they blame that poor girl, but it's reality unfortunately. If the human populace doesn't have the real thing to go after, they target the next best and that's usually the families. "Guilty by association", really messed up honestly.
This is perfect. Both disturbing and also exactly the way a kid might try to rationalize something this horrible.
I love that you say "an empty or two" as opposed to an "empty bottle or two," in order to avoid the echo. The omission is smooth, and it works.
                              
                              Yeah, I know, that's probably a strange thing to love.
Her conflict here is a seriously great touch. The fact that he was somebody she loved, and still loves, makes him human--and all the more frightening.
Laeaton Laeaton Sep 24, 2016
Excited to start a new story of yours. New to me. Thank you Lindsey!❤️