The Mysterious Shifter:The Power and Beauty Within[On Hold]

The Mysterious Shifter:The Power and Beauty Within[On Hold]

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dream-write-hope By dream-write-hope Updated Sep 22, 2011

This is the story of a girl named Lilly who has a very rare and powerfull gift that everyone if trying to get there hands on. Next thing you know Lilly is mated to the Alpha of another pack. will they allie with each other to fight against a very powerful pack known as the bone crushers? what will happen to them? there are many questions with answers read to find out its a really good story and please comment *** sorry not good at descriptions*****

LydiaGonzalez3 LydiaGonzalez3 Apr 12, 2014
It's a good plot but you need to fix the grammar and outline. It's a bit messy but really interesting.
Brodiexx Brodiexx Mar 20, 2011
Ahh, poor Lilly and Joy, trapped with rogues! :( I think u got some of the POV's a lil muddled at one point just thought I'd let u no :) xx
Brodiexx Brodiexx Mar 20, 2011
Awesome! :) So cute! Its a little rushed though, maybe try to slow things down a little? But otherwise awesome, lovely descriptions Jake sounds hot :P a tip tho try putting each new speaker on a new line it makes it a lot easier to read thanks :D xx