Can you save me Alpha?(Under Major Editing)

Can you save me Alpha?(Under Major Editing)

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KaylaNichole By hazeleyez93 Completed

Annies life takes a 180 degree turn one day. She goes from that whole spirited girl to fearing her own life all because it fell into the wrong hands of a man who is known for being the biggest drug dealer in the country. The change in life has turned her into a hallowed soul that is just waiting for an end to come but not everybody gets what they want. Than there was Vincent an alpha of the biggest pack in america a man who was a big man at heart who was always putting his pack before himself. One day he attacked the biggest drug dealer only to gain that one special someone who he's been waiting for his whole life, his soul-mate. But she's not alive, slowly she's fading away.  "they asked if I had something worth fighting for something that made my heart beat faster than it naturally does and than at that exact moment..I thought of you."  I know it's not the best description but please give it a shot I promise I'l do my best:)

ohshisus ohshisus May 05
trying not to be rude but first sentences are already full of errors. Spell check please :)
Really really really good. Keep up the good work! I really like it.
TejaJf TejaJf Apr 18
I would keep this connected to the dialogue FYI but so far so good
Why do I feel like it so sad that even in the first chapter I'm already thinking about the world as if the world was hell plus it's like they have read my thoughts ㅇㅅㅇ
i am sitting here while its raining outside with tea and a good book to read..... ahhhhhhhhhhhhh this is life.:)
angelfire112 angelfire112 Apr 05, 2015
You said you're not good at descriptions yet yours was the only one to draw me in, great job keep going