Denial[WattyAward's 2011]

Denial[WattyAward's 2011]

13.1K Reads 270 Votes 8 Part Story
Alexa By Iismiile Updated Apr 14, 2011

Denial is about a girl named Erin who is dating Devon . A jock he is popular and most girls would die to be with him . Thats probaly why Erin is trying so hard to make things work. You see Devon hasn't been the best lately. He has been abusing Erin . Her parents are getting a divorce , her friend is pregnant and a dark secret is resurfaced . All this push's Erin over the top making her feel like Devon is the only escape . His abusing gets worse but she lives in Denial now hurtin herself and being hurt. How far will this go till something really bad happens.

  • abuse
  • abusiva
  • air
  • anuse
  • awards
  • awareness
  • awarness
  • belie
  • blah
  • book
  • boy
  • boyfriend
  • bus
  • cold
  • contest
  • cool
  • cry
  • death
  • denial
  • desire
  • devon
  • divorce
  • dont
  • erin
  • ewl
  • fair
  • fan
  • feel
  • fool
  • girl
  • haha
  • hit
  • hotline
  • hurt
  • iismiile
  • kicj
  • kick
  • listen
  • lol
  • love
  • naive
  • pain
  • parents
  • poem
  • punch
  • sad
  • sadnerd
  • shelfunbound
  • soaked
  • steel
  • stomach
  • teen
  • though
  • tough
  • trust
  • unfair
  • vote
  • warned
  • watty
acrossthatrainbow acrossthatrainbow May 28, 2011
WOW :0 you are SO good at describing stuff!! absolutely luv it ;) voted!
XxForgottenWhisperxX XxForgottenWhisperxX May 20, 2011
Hmm, the plot is good. I couldn't figure out where the paragraphs started and ended, so it was a bit hard to read. If you spaced them out and fixed all the little grammar mistakes, it'd be a lottt better. go forth and continue it!
JewelsUniqueWriting JewelsUniqueWriting May 18, 2011
My only advice to to put one space between your paragraphs :) But other than that its great and Im curious to read more ! 
ACRL37 ACRL37 May 18, 2011
Hmm...the plot isn't bad although I would space out the paragraphs so it's easier to read and there are grammatical errors in here but they can be easily fixed with a re-edit...anyway, this story has potential, so keep writing! =) 
Iismiile Iismiile Apr 12, 2011
Guys thank you for all the comments I appreciate sooo much and am uploading the next chapter tomorrow :)
YesturdaygirlTomorro YesturdaygirlTomorro Apr 06, 2011
I think its very good. Flows perfectly. I would maybe break up the paragraphs though for an easier read. other than that keep on writing you're doing great!