we are shunned.

we are shunned.

625 Reads 13 Votes 4 Part Story
brokemypromise By brokemypromise Updated Jan 06, 2011

In a society where hair color defines who you are, your success, and your fortune, Lucian decides to stand up and finish what his father started- a revolution. With the help of a few old friends, a few new ones, and possibly a legendary enigmatic rebel force, will they be able to conquer the iron grip of Solair and their ways?

termsandconditionss termsandconditionss Feb 02, 2011
im loving this so far...the words really go in depth and truly effect the readers conscience..its amazing ..u should know that your a realy good author...plz check out myn...i really wish i was as good as you
mylifeisaverage mylifeisaverage Jan 06, 2011
And I forgot. You're 13!! Holy crap, you write amazingly! Keep at it, you will probably be published someday.
mylifeisaverage mylifeisaverage Jan 06, 2011
I wouldn't have used the word "randomly" when the blond was talking about revolution. It's not... Appropriate for the situation. And Gingers ruling? That's really funny. 
mylifeisaverage mylifeisaverage Jan 06, 2011
Good story. I wouldn't have used the word "palpitated" as many people dont know what it means and it's a "big word." I love your writing, I would be hard pressed to do any better on my best day at the keyboard. I like the cover too. Upload soon.
brokemypromise brokemypromise Jan 06, 2011
thank you very much ^^ i'll be sure to upload more soon :D
                              i write at the pace of a snail, so it may take a few days T.T
ashantefaith ashantefaith Jan 05, 2011
sounds interesting :)
                              different from a lot of stories on here. upload soon :)