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The Black Curtain (Josh Dun)

The Black Curtain (Josh Dun)

3K Reads 152 Votes 12 Part Story
clique_pen By clique_pen Updated Jan 25

Ana-(f) insomniac, depressed, anxious, artist, coffee lover, cat owner, from Oklahoma, and dreamless 

Josh-(m) drummer, depressed, anxious, insomniac, coffee lover, hair dye addict, from Ohio, in a band with his best friend, and purposelessness

How they cross paths is just a miracle, and what becomes of them is a blessing in disguise. 
Will Ana be able to dream again without the torturous "nightmares"? And will Josh find a purpose? Guess you'll have to read to find out 
 



Cover Credit to: @briwxah

joshlertrash3005 joshlertrash3005 Sep 15, 2016
this is good, but instead of her criticizing herself, this is a good spot too pull blurry more into the picture. Maybe add some personification to him? (ex, what is his voice like? echoing or calm? etc)
joshlertrash3005 joshlertrash3005 Sep 15, 2016
this is good, but again, dont just chop off the chapter. why is she even listening to blurry? does she agree with him? what is the thought process here, explain her reasoning for leaving,
joshlertrash3005 joshlertrash3005 Sep 15, 2016
we already know the water is cold...this is a good imagery piece, but i would replace this sentence with something else