Bite Marks...

Bite Marks...

21 Part Story 2.1K Reads 34 Votes
Lauren!:) By chasestatus14 Updated Jul 05, 2012

Ambrogino Ciro very much a blood monster, she has been chased from each country with her protector and best friend Fino, they are known to the hunters and are needing to be taken down...and vampire royalty agrees, but do the humans and wolves?

LouBellz LouBellz Nov 14, 2012 08:57AM
not bad for a first chapter. I'm in publishing so I am tuned into writing errors and picking them up.  There are a couple of things but all in all a good start.
chasestatus14 chasestatus14 Dec 27, 2011 08:49PM
@cleowilliams thankyou! Much appreaciated:)!
                                    @AlejandroMontero and thankyou very much:)!
chasestatus14 chasestatus14 Dec 27, 2011 08:40PM
@cleowilliams Thankyou! I'm just going to check yours out, thankyou so much, you have no idea how hard it is to get feedback. much appreaciated and thanks for the vote!:) <3
I thought this was really good :)
                                    Whilst what you've done with the dialogue looks pretty it's not always necessary as usually italics is used to put a stress on a particular word or whatever. 
                                    but yeah, good start! :D x
                                    Keep it up! and you've got my vote :)