She's My Best Friend and I'm In Love With Her Hell of a Player Brother?!

She's My Best Friend and I'm In Love With Her Hell of a Player Brother?!

16.9K Reads 208 Votes 11 Part Story
greeneyedgurl By greeneyedgurl Updated Apr 11, 2011

Jenny Haver falls in love with school player Jake Murphy. Sounds like a fairy tale right? Wrong. Hes a player, whats going to go wrong with that? Read to find out!

Friedtwinky Friedtwinky Apr 02, 2011
Voted, Liked AND tweeted :) Honestly I can't find anything i don't like about this story! I saw like maybe a few grammar mistakes that aren't really a big deal. Everything is spelled correctly. I would today recommend this to a friend or something :P
greeneyedgurl greeneyedgurl Jan 17, 2011
@Xavier19 that's a really good idea! I may steal it I really like that idea thx!!
xLeavexThisxsitex xLeavexThisxsitex Jan 17, 2011
Liked the story, teen romance, cute. ^_^ also, one suggestion, change the title, people tend to shy away from titles that reveal the entire storyline...make it unique like...Fallin for a player...or Player by day.... 
                              
                              other than that...its good..
FallenAngelForever FallenAngelForever Jan 14, 2011
It's deffinately what it sounds to be. I would suggest changing 'thx' to 'thanks' that irked me. Cute story.
greeneyedgurl greeneyedgurl Jan 06, 2011
@TropicShadows haha don't we all as writers? :P but thanks! :D
painismydrug painismydrug Jan 06, 2011
Your story is great. I'm really loving it, especially your description of Jake. Droolworthy. lol