This is about when Gene actully let Zane join his group. And he starts to have feelings for the kid. But some how Zane becomes more vibrant each day and that was attracting a bit of people and meaning a bit I mean all the boys he knew!
I like it, but try not to write huge paragraphs, I recently learned that writing huge paragraphs make the readers lose interest in the story. And it's intimidating, so other then that I really like it <3 good job