The Children with the Color Names

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Katharine M. By FirePokeMaster Completed
~*~*~Four girls with power, water, air, fire, earth, destined to save all. But four girls will get in the way, and try to destroy all~*~*~
    
    Blue, Violet, Red, and Amber always thought they were normal ordinary girls, just with a few strange talents. They all go to a school called Mageia High in Jacksonville Florida and have a normal life. They never meet up and become good friends until the first day of school which is a mixed ages class, and are paired up for a science project. Soon enough, the four girls are given a prophecy to find four stones to save not only their own lives, but the world from a dark evil magic ahead. These stones are known as the Blue stone, Violet stone, Red stone, and Amber stone. To find them, the girls must look hard. But it’s harder than you think. To find these stones, they may have to lie and steal from the ones they love. And at the same time, four other girls are looking for the same stones, and the girls must be aware with the kids they decide to trust. These other girls could be their best friend, or worst enemy. This quest the girls are on is life threatening, and they may lose someone. Could they survive and save the world from the Dark Magic that lies ahead?
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.
Okay, so your writing style is simplistic, but that's fine because this is what most 10 year old's I know, write like. There's a few punctuation mistakes, but they can be fixed easily by editing. 
                                    
                                    The concept is promising, and I like that you put emphasis on the meanings of names, however, for future chapters, try to keep it more mysterious and intriguing by not dumping a truckload of history and info on the reader. 
                                    
                                    Don't give info away so quickly, give it bit by bit, so that the reader can really get interested.