The Hunt

The Hunt

9.2K Reads 203 Votes 8 Part Story
Breonna By YinToTheYang Updated Jun 29, 2015

Maya was found on the side of the road. She can't remember anything except her name, age, she has a secret, and shes been running ever since she could remember. Shes different then everyone just she looks like them- Sometimes. Her life is like anyone else just she can't fit in like everyone else. She meets other kids in her freshman year of highschool and they together go through, what normal children would only dream of.

- - Feb 12, 2013
I like this a lot!! The dialogue is great..in fact, it's exactly as a prologue should be; short yet captivating. Voted :)
YinToTheYang YinToTheYang Nov 17, 2012
@MysticalToffee Really? You think so? I hate this story of mine sooo much. You should read Spirit Patheos 5016. It is much better!
MysticalToffee MysticalToffee Nov 16, 2012
Amazing dialogue.. Love the characters too :) 
                              Its cute and catching.. The prologue captured me and drew me in.. Greats stuff girly :)
alem0007 alem0007 Aug 03, 2012
This is good. You can make the readers to wonder what's gonna happen or what was that? There are few grammar mistakes but only few. You can work on adding more descriptions to help the readers visualize or meet your characters. Anyway, I like the story line.
beautyatwork beautyatwork Jul 27, 2012
This is the perfect length for a prologue, I just don't think it's setup right for a prologue. Maybe that's just me. Anyways it has a nice hook and its mysterious and i liked it.
YinToTheYang YinToTheYang Jul 26, 2012
@ChasingDreams18 I can't seem to give more back ground everytime I try to re write it, I know it needs help badly but I imagine the right time just has to come and I'll be able to write it out more fluently... That was poetic. My baddd