On The Verge{Mauraders Era}

On The Verge{Mauraders Era}

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lost_mermaid By lost_mermaid Updated Feb 02

"They look at me, and see a daring, careless person, not knowing that I am a ticking time bomb, and a threat to them all."
    Elsie Charles comes from a family of shame and secrets. She comes to Hogwarts to escape from it all, but it follows her in the form of a cursed necklace. At Hogwarts, everyone loves the Marauders, but she can't seem stay in a room with them without going over the edge. Elsie tells a new lie every day, each one adding a weight on her chest, but dark forces threaten to expose her every day.  Will her dark secrets turn her to the dark side? Who is trying so hard to ruin her life?

FanFictongirl FanFictongirl Aug 08, 2016
Good Chapter but try to make the chapters a bit longer and add spaces between then paragraphs.
Oceanara-Olympus Oceanara-Olympus Dec 21, 2016
Amazing nicely short doesn't reveal too much but it is perfect
Remus-J-Lupin Remus-J-Lupin Aug 20, 2016
This is a brilliant prologue they aren't usually the longest of chapters nicely summarised.  On my figment account I was advised to put spaces in between my dialogue and paragraphs that's all I'd  suggest. On my laptop I don't do spaces so it was a habit until somebody pointed it out