On The Verge

On The Verge

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lost_mermaid By lost_mermaid Updated 6 days ago

Elsie Charles comes from a family of shame and secrets. She comes to Hogwarts to escape from it all, but it follows her in the form of a cursed necklace. At Hogwarts, everyone loves the Marauders, but she can't seem stay in a room with them without going over the edge. Elsie tells a new lie every day, each one adding a weight on her chest, but mysterious forces cause her wall of concealment to come crashing down. Will she ever be able to trust again? Who is trying so hard to ruin her life?

Good Chapter but try to make the chapters a bit longer and add spaces between then paragraphs.
This is a brilliant prologue they aren't usually the longest of chapters nicely summarised.  On my figment account I was advised to put spaces in between my dialogue and paragraphs that's all I'd  suggest. On my laptop I don't do spaces so it was a habit until somebody pointed it out