'Til Death Do Us Part...

'Til Death Do Us Part...

67.7K Reads 745 Votes 46 Part Story
ReeseyBoo By ReeseyBoo Updated Nov 23, 2012

Under Construction. 

A teenage love story never seemed this real.

ReeseyBoo ReeseyBoo Feb 12, 2011
@equinelover909 thanks for commenting AND voting :) i'm working on fixing their language for four year olds and the grammar errors also.
ReeseyBoo ReeseyBoo Feb 12, 2011
@trishthewriter thanks for commenting and i'll try to fix the dialogue. when i was writing this i forgot to start new lines when someone was speaking, but i'm glad you understood what i was trying to say :)
ReeseyBoo ReeseyBoo Feb 12, 2011
@Unlucky13 thanks for commenting and i'll remember the tip about the adjectives when i go to edit it.
ReeseyBoo ReeseyBoo Feb 12, 2011
@tianajade thanks for commenting and i haven't had a chance to change the dialogue  yet because others have noticed they don't speak like four year olds too. 
ReeseyBoo ReeseyBoo Feb 12, 2011
@tianajade @Unlucky13 @trishthewriter @equinelover909  thanks for commenting and the advice is much appreciated! i have a question though because all for of you said the same thing (i think) ... how is to the story moving to fast? like the first 6 parts or this one part in general?
trishthewriter trishthewriter Feb 12, 2011
You've got talent, but you're story's a bit hard to follow with the mash up of dialogue. You might want to be careful of that. And tianajade is right about the dialogue, but I see what you're going for.