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My Immortal with Commentary

My Immortal with Commentary

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Violet Kingston By VioletKingston Updated Nov 29, 2016

My thoughts when I was reading the infamous bad fanfic "My Immortal" by Tara Gilesbie.

A_Child_Universe A_Child_Universe Dec 20, 2016
Akio (other HP OC): English may not be my first language, but isn't that wrong grammar?
                              Ophelia: Which?
                              Akio: It all.
                              *all of it*
A_Child_Universe A_Child_Universe Dec 20, 2016
Ophelia: W-Where is their shame?! Wearing such kenspeckle clothing to Hogwarts!
A_Child_Universe A_Child_Universe Dec 20, 2016
Akio: No. They're Slytherin. NO. THE SORTING HAT MAKE MISTAKE.
A_Child_Universe A_Child_Universe Dec 20, 2016
Ophelia: Unless they're secretly wizard bands like every other band the author likes.
A_Child_Universe A_Child_Universe Dec 20, 2016
How...? HOW DARE THIS HORRID AUTHOR USE THIS LOVELY WOMAN AS A LOOKALIKE FOR A MARY SUE?! I AM INFURIATED!! 
                              (I'm reading this as a dare. Instantly regretting ever joining the game.)
TechnoWriter TechnoWriter Nov 19, 2016
I'm pretty sure the teachers of Hogwarts won't like the fact that they aren't wearing their uniforms.