I wanted to make her beg for my dick.
I wanted to dominate her, completely.
I vowed then that the next time I came, it would be all over Zoey's face.
And she'd beg for it.
Zoey seems like a b****. I really enjoy the way that you started the story out and gave detail allowing your reader to connect with the narrator. I think this is a great start. Also I choose to read this story simply because of the first line of your absolutely AWESOME summary
Man!!! It isn't healthy for you to just keep it bottled up inside. You need to let it out immediately. Maybe teach her a lesson or two. If you know what I mean *wiggling my eyebrows*
It seems like Zoey is a total pain to him. Let's see what'll happen next 🙌
He has a terrible sister if she hasn't a clue what's going on!
I still really like the book. The only thing that really bothered me was the fact That the chapter seemed short. Maybe try to flesh it out a bit more. The plot however is great so far
jesus, zoey sounds like the devils spawn! man you got me hooked from the summary, i actually really wanna know what happens next :)