Innocent Jeopardy

Innocent Jeopardy

13 Part Story 13K Reads 585 Votes
yellowflower By yellowflower Updated Dec 28, 2012

Emma Wood is in desperate need of money and when her friend hooks her up as a waitress in a local bar and restaurant, Emma has no other alternative than to agree and take the job. Her financial status is already in deep trouble, but she soon realizes that that is not the only thing in trouble. While working there, she falls madly in love with the owner's son, that is, until she finds out his true identity. But it's too late. She is trapped and has to keep her mouth shut or else...

Londonandeye Londonandeye Mar 28, 2012 07:21PM
aww that was so sad and touching. I really feel her emotions.
Jilleigh Jilleigh Mar 28, 2012 03:53PM
This is a good prologue to open the story! Great emotions involved here. Argh, cancer is such a horrid thing. Next chapter should be interesting. :)
slantingwillow slantingwillow Mar 28, 2012 03:44PM
Nice start! I would suggest not using 'had not' in her thoughts, because no one thinks that formally. 'Hadn't' sounds more realistic :) Aside from that, it's a good beginning :) Keep it up!
DeepiChanu DeepiChanu Feb 15, 2012 09:48AM
i know it's important for the plot but granny havin breast cancer just makes  me remember mine. i can relate to her...
ByeByeBitch ByeByeBitch Feb 14, 2012 05:48PM
I like it, it is a great story to the story and drags the reader in for more. I like how you have given some information but not enough to give the whole story away. XD
I like your prologue. I'm gonna continue reading this. :)
                              
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