The Life and Love of Deliah Adelaide Fynn

The Life and Love of Deliah Adelaide Fynn

830 Reads 11 Votes 7 Part Story
Morgen Brightsea By MorgenBrightsea Updated Dec 11, 2014

This is a story about poor Deliah (Dee-lee-ah) Fynn (Fin) who lost her mother, gained responsibilities, and fell in love. She learns not to mess with love potions, to tell the truth, and to be ready to face the consequences of her actions whether they be good or bad.

PeytonNovak PeytonNovak Apr 05, 2011
okay..so its not too bad but i think it wasnt hooking the readers enough..you need a little more umph haha..or however you spell it..just some advise for the next time you write a story..but im looking forward to read the next chapter hopefully it gets better :DDD
FairGuinevere FairGuinevere Jan 10, 2011
Nice this chapter is much better then the first one :) James seems horrid and real so good job there. That emergency button was my wakeup call that this is modern times silly me. Overall this chapter is a huge improvement in keeping interest. 
FairGuinevere FairGuinevere Jan 10, 2011
Ive told you this before but I'm going to say it again this chapter is rather dry and no offense rather boring. Not too good for hooking readers but it does get better in the next chapters.