Biography of a Terrible Man

Biography of a Terrible Man

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Alexis Beard By AlexisBeard Updated 4 days ago

The God of Death gave the wrong name. For this hunt, a disgraced deserter must be summoned. 
      
      An oath never to kill again, and he was on the verge of breaking it. Despite all his promises. 
              
      Kildar, known by the other hunters as Greyskin, was the only one to actually be raised by them, up there in the seclusion of Death's Temple. The world below, with its love of life and reluctance to kill, was completely alien to him. 
                
      Until one day it wasn't. Life, in the end, worked its charms on him as well, and he began to doubt, even to fear, everything the priests of Death had ever taught him. 
                                    
      Disenchanted with their teachings, Kildar seeks redemption in a strange way, one that only works within his confused mind: by setting out on one last hunt.
                    
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KellyJBurke KellyJBurke Sep 20
Feeling emotional. This realization would be devastating, even to a broken mind, and I think you do a good job portraying his struggles here.
I like to keep a character list it helps me to not use the same name twice
smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 25
It felt like there was an unexpected POV shift in the first sentence of this paragraph. Like all of the sudden an omniscient narrator started talking.
KellyJBurke KellyJBurke Sep 22
I envision a different reaction when I read the word 'frenzy', and what follows doesn't seem to match it.
smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 25
I'm a bit confused as to what's going on. I think this is partially because the POV character himself is in something of a fog, but at this point I'm finding myself searching for a clearer problem. I can't really tell what the conflict is.
smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 25
Needs caffeine. I found this opening sentence a bit confusing...do you mean it was a dismal year starting when he forgot about time, or he forgot about time because it was a dismal year?