Biography of a Terrible Man

Biography of a Terrible Man

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Alexis Beard By AlexisBeard Updated Nov 29

The God of Death gave the wrong name. For this hunt, a disgraced deserter must be summoned. 
  
  An oath never to kill again, and he was on the verge of breaking it. Despite all his promises. 
          
  Kildar, known by the other hunters as Greyskin, was the only one to actually be raised by them, up there in the seclusion of Death's Temple. The world below, with its love of life and reluctance to kill, was completely alien to him. 
            
  Until one day it wasn't. Life, in the end, worked its charms on him as well, and he began to doubt, even to fear, everything the priests of Death had ever taught him. 
                                
  Disenchanted with their teachings, Kildar seeks redemption in a strange way, one that only works within his confused mind: by setting out on one last hunt.
          
  Cover by @MelanieBd
  
  Update every Tuesday. :)

What a fantastic beginning, an emotional roller coaster, I think you've already got me hooked.
Uhm... The word "the" is not required here, unless you're trying to be specific. If that's the case, I'd suggest capitalization.
                              e.g. The War
                              :)
 #Inklings
                              This looks interesting! I had some reservations when I realized how dark it sounded from the synopsis, but upon reading this I think I'm going to enjoy it.
                              I love how the feelings and observations of the man were presented. I was really transported there.
                              Great job!
MelanieBd MelanieBd Sep 26
BTW thank you for using my cover! Hope it works with the feeling of the story!
 #inklings 
                              
                              Wow, that was something. I'm not sure what to think about it actually. Haha. Don't get me wrong, I really like it. Your  description and detail to character is really good. I've never read somethin like this before. Very well done. :)
DJAtomika DJAtomika Nov 18
 #Stygian
                              
                              Alright, I like this chapter. It's mysterious in the right ways and it's paced well. Short enough to draw attention to the story, and not too long. The way the characters are presented are great as well! Overall a good read, not too many things to nitpick on. Good job!