Biography of a Terrible Man

Biography of a Terrible Man

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Alexis Beard By AlexisBeard Completed

The God of Death gave the wrong name. For this hunt, a disgraced deserter must be summoned. 
      
      An oath never to kill again, and he was on the verge of breaking it. Despite all his promises. 
              
      Kildar, known by the other hunters as Greyskin, was the only one to actually be raised by them, up there in the seclusion of Death's Temple. The world below, with its love of life and reluctance to kill, was completely alien to him. 
                
      Until one day it wasn't. Life, in the end, worked its charms on him as well, and he began to doubt, even to fear, everything the priests of Death had ever taught him. 
                                    
      Disenchanted with their teachings, Kildar seeks redemption in a strange way, one that only works within his confused mind: by setting out on one last hunt.

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KellyJBurke KellyJBurke Sep 20, 2017
Feeling emotional. This realization would be devastating, even to a broken mind, and I think you do a good job portraying his struggles here.
BookshelfBattle BookshelfBattle Oct 02, 2017
I like to keep a character list it helps me to not use the same name twice
smaoineamh smaoineamh Aug 25, 2017
It felt like there was an unexpected POV shift in the first sentence of this paragraph. Like all of the sudden an omniscient narrator started talking.
KellyJBurke KellyJBurke Sep 22, 2017
I envision a different reaction when I read the word 'frenzy', and what follows doesn't seem to match it.
Tegan1311 Tegan1311 Dec 17, 2017
I'm not sure why 'time' is referenced here. I like the life and death descriptions, but not sure how time is being related. Also, "only death could set you back" I realize you mean, it can set you back on the right path, but it almost reads like death is a 'set-back'
Tegan1311 Tegan1311 Dec 17, 2017
I couldn't tell if he was dead already, but obviously he's not. How does he know so much about death if he's not dead yet? Or is this prologue the already dead character looking back on what lead to his death? I hope that makes sense.