daughter of hell

daughter of hell

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impossible By impossible Updated May 16, 2013

"It's better to reign in Hell then to serve in Heaven."
Lucifer is the daughter of a demon and an angel, not an easy thing to please both parents. But then Luci has chosen sides long ago.

Umm, can you try spacing out dialogue from narration?
                              It confused me to hell. Lol kidding!
Antanazia Antanazia Apr 19, 2013
Gahh it's good 
                              But this huge chunk of writing just PAINS me to no end.
                              ._.
renatawrites renatawrites Jun 11, 2011
This is so funny. :)))) Nice characters too! *voted! You should separate the lines of the characters as well as diff. ideas in different paragraphs. :)
DancingRainbow DancingRainbow May 20, 2011
I like the story plot and it's very unique but try spacing out dialogue from narration. 
                              
                              xoxo ;*
                              NSLove
peanutbarr45 peanutbarr45 Apr 11, 2011
I love your story!! You are an amazing writer :) I've been reading for a long long time...thank you so much for continuing your faboulous story :) <3 
Da-Da-DUM Da-Da-DUM Apr 09, 2011
plz dont rewrite or give up on the story, its awesome the way it is!!  XD
                              
                              dont forget to write more! 
                              xoxoxoxoxo :0)