"It's better to reign in Hell then to serve in Heaven."
Lucifer is the daughter of a demon and an angel, not an easy thing to please both parents. But then Luci has chosen sides long ago.
Umm, can you try spacing out dialogue from narration?
It confused me to hell. Lol kidding!
Gahh it's good
But this huge chunk of writing just PAINS me to no end.
This is so funny. :)))) Nice characters too! *voted! You should separate the lines of the characters as well as diff. ideas in different paragraphs. :)
I like the story plot and it's very unique but try spacing out dialogue from narration.
I love your story!! You are an amazing writer :) I've been reading for a long long time...thank you so much for continuing your faboulous story :) <3
plz dont rewrite or give up on the story, its awesome the way it is!! XD
dont forget to write more!