Moving On

Moving On

1.1K Reads 25 Votes 4 Part Story
OnlyJustaDream By OnlyJustaDream Updated Dec 31, 2010

Lani used to be living life with her drug addicted father. He abused her, and one night he went too far. A neighbor found out about it, and called the police. Her dad is now in jail, and Lani is sent off to live with her mom. She'll have to start a new life, with new people, and try to make friends. But there's only one way to do that-- Keep her dad a secret, and try to forget about her past.

TazzyGirl TazzyGirl Dec 29, 2010
Jace sounds so cute! I really hope he doesn't turn out to be a jerk..But that would be a great twist anyway. Keep writing, we all love it!
TazzyGirl TazzyGirl Dec 29, 2010
I really like this beginning! In a minute I'll be going onto the next chapter. I noticed things were a little rushed... Maybe she could have continued the conversation with Ali for a little bit longer. Otherwise, it seems great! Well done :)
TabithaTragedy TabithaTragedy Dec 29, 2010
i want to read more!!! and jace seems cool. i hope this will be a romance...=)
TabithaTragedy TabithaTragedy Dec 29, 2010
I like the way you began it, just make sure you don't go through things too fast or rush anything. It's pretty short, but I like it that way. If a chapter's too long i would be bored. it seems like it will be really good! keep it up! and i voted!
                              
AoiKansai AoiKansai Dec 26, 2010
Nice Start! :)
                              I love the story line so farr upload more please :)
                              btw what do you think of my story?
acakenson acakenson Dec 25, 2010
Mmmm jace sounds tasty :) lol, I'm wondering what the conflict in your story will be. I mean, even though I kind of know what it will be, I still don't exactly see how it will unravel :3