Bella decides to stay at Phoenix and not go to Forks. What she doesn't know is that things will still go wrong differently, but also the same.
@missmental1 Sorry i havnt g ot the facts right, i dont live in America at all, so sorry :)
Ummm. Just One Thought. It's Washington State not D.C. Washington D.C. Is more like a city than a state...
lol guud point, i might change that, thanks :D xx <3
great job, but also to make it sound like Charlie and Bella are like pausing or thinking, do this:
"Bella...? Honey, please? I really want you to come..." He paused. "Please...? It's been years...and...please, Bella?"
IDK just a suggestion...but its okay lol
That is right. Thanks i didnt think about that. Thanks
This is good but did you think of why Edward wasnt in Pheonix in the actual books? Vampires cant go out in daylight no matter what. You needed to think about that.