He Coaches Me in Sports, and Also Love

He Coaches Me in Sports, and Also Love

26.4K Reads 325 Votes 11 Part Story
Kathy By Beautiful_ME17 Updated Aug 05, 2011

Chelsie Hertwood is a teen who met a very awkward but handsome coach during basketball tryouts, a sport that she really likes. This coach, Coach Jadon, is suprisingly very young and is about the same age as her and is in fact going to the school that she is! Jaydon's relationship with Chelsie Hertwood is getting fishier everyday. He even asked her to be his partner in the school dance? What will she do? Will this girl fall for this handsome coach? What will her friends say? How is her friend Selina Garan's relationship with Jesse affect her?

mkay007 mkay007 Jan 19, 2015
your thoughts are going everywhere
                              
                              first you talk about a coach then you go to talking about finding a guy
                              
                              slow it down and work your way into this kinds of details
batmansxrobin batmansxrobin Nov 11, 2011
I've actually read this before, but I've never left a comment. :D The only criticisms I can honestly give you, is to be careful with your spacing. It makes a little difficult to read. Oh! And be careful not to have too many ellipses (...), other than that, you have a nice start.
Beautiful_ME17 Beautiful_ME17 Jul 12, 2011
@princesscancer Thanks for your support! Haha I'll keep in mind to make it longer :)
princesscancer princesscancer Jul 12, 2011
i hope you can write more than one page for every chapter, but anyhow i'm totally enjoy this story! :)