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Brave and Tortured [ON HOLD]

Brave and Tortured [ON HOLD]

5K Reads 121 Votes 4 Part Story
Lari Jones By badassgirly Updated Sep 03, 2016

Carter Manning is sixteen and had been abused since she was ten. Nobody knows what goes on inside the walls of her home. She's too scared to tell anyone and too scared to run. Her mother died giving birth and her father blames her. Her step mother and step brother consider a her a worthless piece of crap. 

Tyler Greyson is seventeen and has an amazing, beautiful and kind family. His family is rich and Tyler seems to have never had a problem in his life. He's smart, kind and funny like the rest of his family. But he's got a secret.

What will happen when Tyler meets Carter? When they talk for the first time? How will she change his perspective on the world and how will he show her the good in it? What will happen when secrets are revealed? Join Tyler and Carter in their journey to new perspectives and true love.

Highest Ranking: 160- 10.22.16

NOTE: I will be taking the story down to edit once it is complete. If you get so mad with the incorrect wording, use of words or spelling, idc. Ima fix it later. Even real, published books have errors. I've seen them.

AsherTensei AsherTensei Apr 10
One thing for flow; removed like words that appear within maybe three lines. For instance, staircase and stairs maybe be a bit redundant when you use them so close together. Finding another word may add a different structure to your sentence.
AsherTensei AsherTensei Apr 10
I feel remorse for Carter. Even more so that the hideous dad may not see anything he is doing as wrong. Hope things look up for our main character. 
                              Nice job with making these words convey this image. Onto the next chapter!
nana88321 nana88321 Sep 07, 2016
I have no words! This chapter gave me so many emotions. I'm excited to read this! 😃
It is just the first chapter, and I'm already likinh this book. Yes, it is a sad story, but the way you write it in is so good. It makes  it exciting, and I'm looking forward to reading more :)
jccworks jccworks Jan 10
omg, I get this feeling that the protagonist has been punished by this family, and I'm just overly curios why! I love the writing you've done so far, it's relatable and easy to follow!
Lol I was just about to comment that above ^ since this is lit and not dialogue or thoughts the word government should be spelled out.